Writing Week 8

 Kia Ora welcome back to my blog,

This week we had to pick one of the sustainable goals and make an info graphic about it. I pick word hunger so I could use some facts from my speech. Here it is i hope you like it.

I used google drawing to create my work for this week.

What statistic do you find the hardest to believe?

Writing W5

 Aloha welcome back to my blog,

this week for writing we finished our speeches and next week we will be rehearsing them. Right now I will explain the 10 pieces of information we had to use, we called them shapes. I wrote them all separately then put them together so my speech is only 6 paragraphs but it includes all the key shapes. Here they are.

 Rhetorical question

Hard hitting statistics

Specify problem

Challenge

Solution

Change

Call to action 

Aims 

Acting together

Big finish

Here is my favourite paragraph I have written so far,

In the end we aim that world hunger may not be a thing by 2030, due to Covid-19 these

time limits may be extended. Why shouldn’t we start now. Starting in a couples years time wont help those that pass away while we are trying to make a start. Lets come together and start now!

Overcoming Hunger and Poverty is not a task of charity, it is an act of justice, It is man made

and it can be over come and combated, by the actions of human beings, sometimes it falls on

a generation to be great, you can be that generation. Let your greatness  blossom.-Nelson Mandela.

What type of writing do you like doing?

See you next time Bye :)

Writing W4

 Aloha welcome back to my blog, 

this week for writing I just continued to write my speech. In next weeks writing blog I will teach you about the shapes we are using to form out persuasive text. This week we found facts and wrote about 3 different shapes. My speech is really starting to come together! here is one of the paragraphs I wrote this week.

This is part of my first paragraph and my third paragraph 

The united nations estimate that 9 million people starve to death every year. In America alone

41 million people struggle to provide food for their families or even themselves along with lots of

other countries. The Central African Republic remains at the top of the list as the hungriest

country in the world.

The main aim is to end world hunger, to have food security and achieve sustainable agriculture.

We all want our families to have lots of healthy and nutritious food, but when chuck away the

extra food scraps we seem to not think about those in other countries or even those in our country

that live everyday with a small bowl of food that needs to feed the whole family.  A world with

zero hunger can positively impact our economies, health, education, equality and social

development, the goal is to have the issue solved by 2030. Covid-19 has negatively impacted

world hunger. That's according to a yearly report published by the UN into the state of food

security and nutrition worldwide. They stated that nearly 690 million people went hungry in 2019

and that number could rise by between 90 and 132 million in 2020.

I hope you like my speech so far, what do you like most about it?

See you next time Bye :)

Writing W3

Aloha welcome back to my blog,

this week for week for  writing we read a persuasive text and picked out the sections that were part of the description for a "good" persuasive speech.I had to pick a problem out of  Zero hunger, Health and mental illness, Poverty and good education.  I the started to write a little bit of my speech around Zero Hunger children. Here is the start I made.

World Hunger

The world produces enough food for everyone, yet more than 3 million children die of hunger every year. WHY? 66 million primary school-age children attend classes hungry across the developing world, with 23 million in Africa alone. Poor nutrition causes nearly half of deaths in children under five years old. Climate change continues to put pressure on our food industries every year and doesn't help to fuel the children who are starving and cant do anything about it. 

Hard hitting statistics: 

• 795 million hungry and the additional 2 billion people expected by 2050.

• Globally, one in nine people in the world today are undernourished

• 12.9 per cent of the population is undernourished.

• Poor nutrition causes nearly half of deaths in children under five

• 3.1 million children each year.

What world problem would you pick?

See you next time Bye :)

Writing W2

Aloha welcome back to my blog,

This week for Writing we continued to focus on the Hansel and Gretal story. We wrote sentences with Repetition,Alliteration and one other one.

She fed him caramelized cookies, she fed him chocolate cookies, she fed him crunchy cookies, she fed him crunchy caramelized cookies and she fed him crunchy chocolate cookies.

He ate perfect pasta, He ate pink pasta, He ate pepperoni pizza 

He got fatter and fatter, he got wider and wider, He grew outwards and outwards and soon he would be the fattest and largest he could possibly be.

Gretal was filled with a great idea, he grabbed a thin bone for the witch to feel he bamboozled the old lady making her think he hadn't gain any weight keeping himself safe from her massive stomach.

What is your favourite text feature to use in writing?

See you next time Bye

Writing W1 Term 3

Aloha welcome back to my blog,

This week for writing my task was to use the fantastic and write some sentences relating to Hansel and Gretel.

3 sentences using repetition

Crazy Cathy and her cats had a cool crafty creation.

Lazy Lucy lay in her luxurious lazyboy.

Milly loves Muffins, maltesers, macaroni and mango.

3 sentences describing the woods

The smell of wet grass wafted into my nose.

I heard the  sound of the pine needles crumbling under my feet.

The owls flew through the pitch black night sky.

3 sentences how the wood smelt

The wood smelt musty

I sniffed up the dust and let out a roaring sneeze

Write me 3 sentences describing a parrot in the comments!

See you next time Bye :)

Writing W10 👍👑

Aloha, welcome back to my blog

This week my goal for writing was to: Deliberately use written and visual language features when appropriate to enhance writing. We made a poster on how others can use these text features. I hope you like my poster.

What text feature do you think you use the most?

See you next time :)

Writing W9🐨😦

Kia Ora welcome back to my blog,

This week my goal for writing was to:use complex sentences that are grammatically correct. I made 3 complex sentences and I made a document to show them I then had to pick one to demonstrate which I did with some hand actions and a couple of friends! Here is my Document with my complex sentences.

See you next time Bye :)

Writing W8 😃📘

Aloha Welcome back to my blog,

This week for writing I had to plan and make a start on a narrative. Here is my plan so you can get an Idea about what I'm writing, then I will share a paragraph of my story.
(I have not finished my story so that will probably be shared on next weeks writing blog)

I hope you like my Ideas here is the start I have made to my story.

My chain started to chug as the dry brown grass was churned around by the rusty chain on my old blue bike. I continued to ride and jumped off my bike when I got to a short patch of grass. I knelt down onto my ripped denim jeans tying the shoelace of my dirty white converses. I grabbed the chain with my bare hands and when I pulled away my hands were covered in dark brown rust. I smack them against my legs brushing the rust away. I stood up and turned around to see a light grey rabbit sitting at my feet, I jumped in shock as I was surprised at what I had seen. She whimpered in the cold breeze. I walked to the back of my bike to see that the rabbit's tail was covered in blood and only hanging on by a short piece of fluff. I grabbed my red raincoat and wrapped the cold shivering rabbit in it. I lifted her up and put her into the front pouch of my bike. I  wrapped the chain back around the connections on my bike and pedalled as fast but as gently as possible until I got home. I picked the rabbit out of the basket and shoved my stand down onto the concrete. I raced up the stairs and opened the front door. I slipped my shoes off and walked quietly into the house toward the first aid box in the pantry. I grabbed a paper towel, a small bandage and a little pair of scissors. I slowly snipped  the extra fur off her tail, wet the paper towel, cleaned away the blood and wrapped it in a bandage. My head slowly turned to the right as I saw4  blonde pigtails flap up and down around the corner. I stood quickly in front of the rabbit trying to hide her. But all I could do was not enough. My two older sister  walked straight behind me all I could her was 

“How Poor of you to bring dirty wild animals into our house!” One Screamed .

“This rabbit was hurt and needed some help, I was just trying to be kind” Charles replied in a trembling voice.

“Never will you do this again you dirty young man, GET OUT” The oldest shouted in his face.

Stay tuned for the finish result next week!

 Whats your fav type of story to write?

See you next time Bye :)

Writing W7 👓😅

Bula, welcome back to my blog,

This week my goal for Writing was to: Use show not tell when appropriate. We had to find a pobble and describe the setting using show not tell. I also turned 3 basic sentences into more described sentences using show not tell, Here they are!

It was hot : The sweat dripped off her forehead as she guzzled down the last little bit of her cold fresh water.

He was sad: The tears dripped down his face as he pulled the covers up over  his head

The man was stressed : He took a deep breath and  clenched his fists as he stomped over to his boss.

The girl was excited :She jumped in the air and let out a little scream as her Aunty brung in the new puppy.

Here is the pobble I used for my actual Paragraph!

And here is what I wrote to describe the setting.

I felt the bumps on the stem of the rose as the street lights flickered on and off. The rain sprinkled on to the concrete washing away the newly painted lines of the road. The gloomy winter's day faded into a gloomy winter's night as the river of tears ran down my cheeks. My nose twitches in the wind as my teeth chatter together. My nose and ears begin to turn purple as the snow starts to shower down. The goosebumps begin to appear on my skin as I curl into a ball on the parkside bench. The rose slowly slips out of my hand and away in the wind. I drift into a deep sleep dreaming about being in a warm house with a fireplace and blankets. 

Write me a show not tell about how your day is going so far in the comments!

See you next time Bye :)

Writing Term 2 Week 5! 😎🐨

Bula welcome back to my blog,

This week in writing I didn't have a goal. We had to write a narrative about one of the 4 prompts the teachers gave us. It had to be between 250-300 words. Here is the prompt I chose. It is called Creature from the deep. Here is my story hope you like it!

The bathroom door banged, as the wind blew through the opened rusty window. The fireplace crackled and popped as the orange flames burned the rotten old wood. Levi’s dark brown curly hair sat on the top of his head, along with the glasses that are wrapped around his rather large ears. His ocean blue eyes stared into the glass on the microwave as he checked on his dinner. Levi slurped down his spaghetti while he watched the 6 o’clock news. The weather was said to be very rainy and a thunderstorm was supposed to hit later that night. He got up from the couch and rang his mother. 

“Hello mum, I’m very worried about the thunderstorm that is supposed to hit later this evening” I explained.

“Come over to mine you can use the spare room” she replied.

“Ok I will be right over”. I said with a warm feeling in my heart.

While I packed  my bags and got ready to head away, I continued to think about the long drive in the miserable weather. Thoughts were running though about the thunder storm hitting while I was on my way. I jumped in the car and began my drive. I was nearly half way as I heard a big bang coming from the sky. I could hear the waves banging against the shore as I drew closer and closer towards the beach.  As I drove past the beach a large wave flew over the concrete barrier that separated the beach from the road. I just dodged the water from hitting my car when something slimy and black looking landed on my windscreen. Then I heard a squirting sound as my windscreen was filled with black ink. Oh no, I pulled to the side of the road and called for help.

Give me some feedback about my story in the comments!

See you next time Bye :)

Poems! Writing Week 4 Term 2.👍🙈

Kia Ora, welcome back to my blog.

This week my goal for writing was to: Selects words and phrases to enhance meaning and/or mood, Confidently shape ideas for effect. We had to pick a type of poem and write it. I chose Octopoem and I wrote it about sponge bob. Then I used a website called canva to make work look pretty . I'll teach you a little bit about an Octopoem.

An Octopoem has 8 lines.

The first line describes the character/person/pet up against a colour.The second line describes the character/person/pet against a season.The third line describes the character/person/pet as a place.The fourth line describes the character/person/pet as a type of weather.The fifth line describes the character/person/pet as a piece of clothing. The sixth line describes the character/person/pet piece of furniture. The seventh line describes the character/person/pet as a TV show or Movie. The last line describes the character/person/pet as a food. Here is my poem I hope you like it.

Have you ever written a poem? Give me an Idea of something I can write another octopoem about !

See you next time Bye :)

Complex Sentences Writing! 👍👀📘

Bula welcome back to my blog,

This week for writing my goal was to: use complex sentences that are grammatically correct / proofread for spelling, grammar and punctuation. I had to show my thinking of 4 complex sentences. A complex sentence has two parts an independent clause which can be used as its own sentence, and then a dependent clause which depends on and independent clause to make it make sense. I used a google drawing to show my ideas of four basic complex sentences.

Tell me a complex sentence about your favourite Animal!
See you next time Bye :)

Writing 👓😃

Kia Ora welcome back to my blog,

This week for writing my was to: Revise and rework writing for clarity, impact and purpose. proofread for spelling, grammar and punctuation. We had to watch some videos about rewriting and revising and finish our rubric about the report we wrote. Since I had already done that I went through my writing and found evidence of goals I haven't ticked off. This will help me to tick of my goals faster. Here is a little example of one of the parts I highlighted as a goal.

Next I had to make a DLO ( digital learning object) about the top 3 punctuation to always remember when writing. Here it is!



Who do you look up to as a worthy and admirable New Zealander?
See you next time BYE :)

Handy Hamburger 😎🐸

Kia Ora welcome back to my blog,

This my goal for writing was: deliberately choose a clear, controlled and logical text structure to suit the audience and purpose.

My task this week was to make a template that a younger student could use. I chose to make mine for Tumu which is the Year 5&6 hub.

What template/layout do you use for your writing?

Give your hands a clean clean clean!😃

Hello, welcome back to my blog.
This week for writing my goal was: Understand the purpose for writing, and how to achieve those purposes. We wrote a procedure on how to wash your hands properly as there are lots of bugs travelling round at the moment. Here is my procedure.

How will you wash you hands differently after looking at this blog post?

Poem! 😎

Aloha, welcome back to my blog!

Today I will be showing you the poem I wrote about myself for writing in week 7. This poem is called a Haiku. It had 5 syllables the 7 syllables the 5 syllables and I had to write 3 verses. Afterwards I had to make it look fancier by adding colour. Here it is I hope you enjoy it.

What your favourite type of poem to write?
See you next time Bye :)

Lorde Profile Page

Kia Ora welcome back to my blog,
Today I will be showing you a profile page that I made for Lorde as a part of the summer learning journey.

Who's your favourite singer?
See you next time Bye :)

Writing 😊📜

Kia Ora welcome back,

Today I will be sharing a story I wrote a couple weeks ago about a recount of my birthday party. Here it is. I hope you enjoy it.

My Big Birthday Bash

8:01am 

The 17th of August. My 12th birthday was finally here. I was so excited to open my presents and celebrate my birthday with my family and best friends. It wasn’t a very nice day, it was cold, miserable and rainy outside. First I opened my presents. I got a new necklace, some new earrings and a new hoodie! Next I went to watch my big brother play football. It was slippery and wet but the birthday spirit shone through, I was so happy for him, he is one of my best friends. 

1:09pm

It was time for netball.I was so excited to pick, Maia and Ruby up. When we got to netball we warmed up then 10 minutes later. Tweet, the game had started. Although the referees had a little argument we still played well and were happy with our result. I got a few intercepts but the court was so slippery, so I also slipped a couple of times. My aunty showed up to netball and I was so happy to see her there as she once was in the representative canterbury team.

2:37pm

On the way home from netball we listened to music and had fun chatting in the back seat until we got home. It was time for a shower and put some nice, warm dry clothes on. I put on my new hoodie. I love it! It is so warm and soft.Maia and Ruby had a shower too and got changed out of their sweaty netball clothes. We waited for all the other girls to arrive. 

4:30pm

Knock knock, the first people had arrived. Knock knock, more people! Knock knock the last  people have arrived. Dad went down to get the dinner from the fish and chip shop, while Mum prepared the dumplings, plates and sauces. 

5:29pm

We jumped into the car and went to the movie theatre, we watched the dogs purpose 2. The emotions were crazy laughing and crying at the same time, wow, who says girls can’t double task. Mum made up some lolly bags for us to munch on during the movies. 

7:38pm

After the movie I opened my presents. So many nice things and lots of chocolate. Sienna went crazy! Maybe she had too many lollies in the movie! She just couldn’t stop laughing. But if you know anything about here that's not very rare.

9:00pm 

Everyone has gone home now, it’s so quiet! I have had a great birthday today but I’ve been so busy I think it’s time for bed now. Good night. zzzzzzzz

What are your favourite things to do at birthday parties?
 See you next time bye:)

Instructions☝😎

Kia Ora, welcome back to my blog.

Today I will be talking about my instructions. As you should know I picked Australia out of the hat so I had to write some instructions on how to make something original or a skill from Australia.  I chose to write instructions on how to draw the Australian flag. Here are my instructions.

How to draw the Australian flag

Equipment you will need: Piece of A4 paper, Blue pen/pencil, red pencil, ruler.

1. First go to the top left corner, get your ruler and mark a little line 10cm down the edge.
2.  Draw a line from the edge of the paper across 15cm.

3. Then connect the line to the top of the page, now you should have a box in the top left corner.
4. Directly below the box draw a big star and draw 4 smaller stars next to the box.
5.  Now draw a cross in the box, connecting a line coming from each side of the cross.

• Here's what your drawing should be looking like now. -)

6. Finally colour in the major part of the flag blue leaving the stars white.
7. Colour in the cross and and the small part of the lines coming out the cross red. 
8. Have fun!!

• This is what your finished product

should look like. 

You should try my instructions! Are they well written?

See you next tine Bye :)