This week my goal for Writing was to: Use show not tell when appropriate. We had to find a pobble and describe the setting using show not tell. I also turned 3 basic sentences into more described sentences using show not tell, Here they are!
It was hot : The sweat dripped off her forehead as she guzzled down the last little bit of her cold fresh water.
He was sad: The tears dripped down his face as he pulled the covers up over his head
The man was stressed : He took a deep breath and clenched his fists as he stomped over to his boss.
The girl was excited :She jumped in the air and let out a little scream as her Aunty brung in the new puppy.
Here is the pobble I used for my actual Paragraph!
And here is what I wrote to describe the setting.
I felt the bumps on the stem of the rose as the street lights flickered on and off. The rain sprinkled on to the concrete washing away the newly painted lines of the road. The gloomy winter's day faded into a gloomy winter's night as the river of tears ran down my cheeks. My nose twitches in the wind as my teeth chatter together. My nose and ears begin to turn purple as the snow starts to shower down. The goosebumps begin to appear on my skin as I curl into a ball on the parkside bench. The rose slowly slips out of my hand and away in the wind. I drift into a deep sleep dreaming about being in a warm house with a fireplace and blankets.
Write me a show not tell about how your day is going so far in the comments!
See you next time Bye :)
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